In this video, we’re exploring how to use sensory references without writing long, overwhelming descriptions that slow down your story. I share my concept of “a world in a word or phrase” and Linda Landrigan’s “telling detail”—both of which will transform how you approach revision. You’ll see a powerful before-and-after example that demonstrates exactly how one well-chosen sensory detail can completely change the atmosphere of a scene.
The question is about sensory references. This is, in fact, an important part of your revision plan. And so a question about how to implement that part of the plan is an excellent one. Think of the five senses. What you see, what you hear, taste, feel, and smell. To create an immersive experience for the reader, you need to sensory references to help them be in the moment. But we don’t write long descriptions anymore. Why? Because people have access to TV, the Internet, anything they’re interested in available for them. no longer armchair travelers in that same way. What we have to do is what I call a world in a word or phrase.
You have to be able to put them in that moment sensory descriptions with just a or a phrase.
Linda Landrigan, the editor-in-chief of Alfred Hitchcock Mystery Magazine, refers to it as the “telling detail.” In my book, Beat the Bots, I give a couple of examples, and I let me share them with you because I think it really helps illuminate this challenge.
“I have to go,” Mary said.
“I’m late.” “Don’t go,” Tom whispered, kissing her neck.
“I have to go,” Mary said.
The sun peeked through the broken slats of the old Venetian blinds.
“I’m late.”
“Don’t go,” Tom whispered, kissing her neck.
In other words, the dialogue hasn’t changed. But by adding that one-sentence description, “broken Venetian blinds, the sun low,” you get a feel for the place Mary and Tom I know you can do it. Be specific. Be precise. Ask yourself, once again, what are you trying to express?
I’d love to read your comments about how you implement it, what your experience has been.
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